What customs in your country do you think should be revised?
학생이 쓴 원문
As I talked with you in yesterday\'s class, I think ancestral rites should me abolished or revised.
Although most of ancestral rites are for father side ancestors, only women prepare many foods and the only thing men do is bow in front of the table.
For that reason, there are a lot of conflicts happen during national holidays between married couples.
Also, preparing large amounts of food is waste of money and time.
So I think that we should abolish it at all or revise to the way all family members could be happy like \\\\\\\"eating out\\\\\\\" delicious menu together.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]. Again, it\'s a pleasure having to read your composition. Take note of your questions if you have and we\'ll talk about it in class. I look forward to talking to you tomorrow. Have a good one! ~ teacher Jane ^^
As I talked with you in yesterday\'s class, I think ancestral rites should me abolished or revised.
>>> As I mentioned in yesterday\'s class, I think ancestral rites should be abolished or revised.
Although most of ancestral rites are for father side ancestors, only women prepare many foods and the only thing men do is bow in front of the table.
>>> Since most ancestral rites are patriarchal, only women prepare many foods and the only men do is bow in front of the ancestral table.
For that reason, there are a lot of conflicts happen during national holidays between married couples.
>>> For that reason, there are a lot of conflicts happening during national holidays between married couples.
Also, preparing large amounts of food is waste of money and time.
>>> Also, preparing large amounts of food is a waste of money and time.
So I think that we should abolish it at all or revise to the way all family members could be happy like \\\\\\\"eating out\\\\\\\" delicious menu together.
>>> So I think that we should abolish it at all or revise in a way all family members could be happy like eating out or eating delicious dishes together.
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