What dangers can be found in the kitchen that can cause accidents?
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Hello Christine!
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I understand that English could be really difficult.
But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.
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T. Christina ^^
Here are my corrections for you:
There are several dangerous things int the kitchen which can cause serious problem for my family.
>> There are several dangerous things in the kitchen which can cause serious problems or accidents for my family.
First thing is the location of knife.
>> First thing is the location of the knife.
When my husband does the dishes, sometimes he puts the knife in the direction of knife-egde.
>> When my husband does the dishes, sometimes he puts the knife in the direction where we can get a cut from the edge of the knife.
I give a warning to him whenever I saw it happens because it is easy to get a cut and injured ourselves.
>> I give a warning to him whenever I see this happening because it is easy to get a cut and injure ourselves.
Second thing is carelessness of gas stove.
>> Second thing is carelessness with the gas stove.
Since I have a baby, she calls me out from time to time with exceptional circumstances.
>> Since I have a baby, she cries for me from time to time with the exception of some circumstances.
When I cook especially boiling stew, it can be easy to forget the fact that I was cooking during looking after my child.
>> When I cook, especially when I\'m cooking boiling stew, it can be easy to forget that I am cooking while looking after my child.
So I need to be alert more when I do cooking in order to prevent a catastrophic disaster.
>> So I need to be more alert when I am cooking in order to prevent a catastrophic disaster.
The last not but least thing is the use of electronic device.
>> Last but not the least is the use of electronic devices.
Thesedays, we use many electronic cooking equipment such as airfryer, electronic rice cooker, refrigerator and so on.
>> These days, we use many electronic cooking equipment such as air fryer, electronic rice cooker, refrigerator and so on.
They make our life much easier and convenient beyond doubt.
>> CORRECT!
However as we own many equipments, accident probability also raied.
>> However, as we own many equipment, the probability of accidents happening is also increased.
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