What dangers can be found in the kitchen that can cause accidents?

2020-03-02 · 첨삭 강사 Christina

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There are several dangerous things int the kitchen which can cause serious problem for my family. First thing is the location of knife. When my husband does the dishes, sometimes he puts the knife in the direction of knife-egde. I give a warning to him whenever I saw it happens because it is easy to get a cut and injured ourselves. Second thing is carelessness of gas stove. Since I have a baby, she calls me out from time to time with exceptional circumstances. When I cook especially boiling stew, it can be easy to forget the fact that I was cooking during looking after my child. So I need to be alert more when I do cooking in order to prevent a catastrophic disaster. The last not but least thing is the use of electronic device. Thesedays, we use many electronic cooking equipment such as airfryer, electronic rice cooker, refrigerator and so on. They make our life much easier and convenient beyond doubt. However as we own many equipments, accident probability also raied.

강사 첨삭

Hello Christine!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:

There are several dangerous things int the kitchen which can cause serious problem for my family.

>> There are several dangerous things in the kitchen which can cause serious problems or accidents for my family.
First thing is the location of knife. 

>> First thing is the location of the knife. 

When my husband does the dishes, sometimes he puts the knife in the direction of knife-egde. 

>> When my husband does the dishes, sometimes he puts the knife in the direction where we can get a cut from the edge of the knife. 

I give a warning to him whenever I saw it happens because it is easy to get a cut and injured ourselves.
>> I give a warning to him whenever I see this happening because it is easy to get a cut and injure ourselves.
Second thing is carelessness of gas stove. 

>> Second thing is carelessness with the gas stove. 

Since I have a baby, she calls me out from time to time with exceptional circumstances. 

>> Since I have a baby, she cries for me from time to time with the exception of some circumstances. 

When I cook especially boiling stew, it can be easy to forget the fact that I was cooking during looking after my child. 

>> When I cook, especially when I\'m cooking boiling stew, it can be easy to forget that I am cooking while looking after my child. 

So I need to be alert more when I do cooking in order to prevent a catastrophic disaster.
>> So I need to be more alert when I am cooking in order to prevent a catastrophic disaster.
The last not but least thing is the use of electronic device. 

>> Last but not the least is the use of electronic devices. 

Thesedays, we use many electronic cooking equipment such as airfryer, electronic rice cooker, refrigerator and so on. 

>> These days, we use many electronic cooking equipment such as air fryer, electronic rice cooker, refrigerator and so on. 

They make our life much easier and convenient beyond doubt. 

>> CORRECT!

However as we own many equipments, accident probability also raied.

>> However, as we own many equipment, the probability of accidents happening is also increased.

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