What did you do a lot when you were young, but now you barely do?

2025-01-15 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

Well, if I think about it, I bought a lot of Barbie dolls or princess dolls and did role play. At that time, girls almost had Barbie dolls or princess dolls and I also had trendable dolls. I made friends as the doll, I could dress it up, and I could play roles together. Thanks to this, it became a good childhood memory and I was able to satisfy one of my fantasies. I was very young, but I think I was able to realize a little bit about fashion and design. But other people will think I\'m childish if I say I have such a doll now. Nowdays, I own a cute character doll rather than a doll like that. Most of them are used to decorate my space.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and memories in this essay! I really enjoyed reading about your experience with dolls and how they brought you joy and creativity as a child. You’ve done a great job explaining how these toys influenced your understanding of fashion and design at a young age.

~ Teacher Gina


Well, if I think about it, I bought a lot of Barbie dolls or princess dolls and did role play.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: When I think about it, I used to buy a lot of Barbie dolls or princess dolls and role-play with them.

At that time, girls almost had Barbie dolls or princess dolls and I also had trendable dolls.
>> At that time, most girls had Barbie dolls or princess dolls, and I also had trendy dolls.

I made friends as the doll, I could dress it up, and I could play roles together.
>> I pretended the doll was my friend, dressed it up, and acted out roles with it.

Thanks to this, it became a good childhood memory and I was able to satisfy one of my fantasies.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: These experiences became cherished childhood memories and allowed me to fulfill one of my fantasies.

I was very young, but I think I was able to realize a little bit about fashion and design.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Even as a young child, I think I gained some understanding of fashion and design.

But other people will think I\'m childish if I say I have such a doll now.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: But others might think I’m childish if I admit to having such a doll now.

Nowdays, I own a cute character doll rather than a doll like that.
>> Nowadays, I own a cute character doll rather than a doll like that.
>> Or: Nowadays, I prefer cute character dolls instead of dolls like that.

Most of them are used to decorate my space.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I mainly use them to decorate my space.

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