What did you do with your first salary? What were the things you bought? Did you give it to someone?
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Well, as I remember it, the things that I received a first salary to change my smart phone and electronic device like an wireless earphones and laptop. Also, I didn\'t give my money to my parents before I got a salary. But sometimes, I used to do it. :)
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Nice work, Elic! Thank you for your efforts in this homework. First of all, I just want to greet you a happy new year! You have been so amazing this year! Pat yourself on the back because you\'ve made it and you worked hard in 2022. Please review the corrections I have placed here. All are very simple corrections, just some alternative sentences which makes the sentences have complete thoughts. Thank you once again for your efforts in making your homework every day! Keep it up!
- Teacher Raven
>> Well, if I remember correctly, I bought a new smart phone and some electronic devices like wireless earphones and a laptop with my first salary.
Also, I didn\'t give my money to my parents before I got a salary.
>> Also, I didn\'t give some of my salary to my parents.
>> Also, I didn\'t give some of my salary to my parents.
But sometimes, I used to do it.
>> But I do it sometimes.
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