What disease frightens you the most? Why? What do you do to stay healthy?
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Whenever I have a symptom which lasts for more than a week, I always worry if It is a cancer. I don\'t know why it comes up on my brain, I guess that it is the most serious and frightened disease that I know. Although, it\'s cure rate has been increasing, there are still a lot of people who die due to a cancer. The incidence rate of cancer has been increasing due to the bad diet and the improvement of disgnostic technologies. I am scared if I have a cancer and it is impossible to control pain, I would like to be killed because the pain is horrible that patients can\'t endure without pain killer. I am not sure if I can manage my health mentally and physically. There are uncountable information to keep our health. We have seen it on TV, news papers and so on. However, it is nealy possible to keep right habits even thought, we know what we have to eat, drink and do. Eating healthy food, doing exercise regulary and avoiding unhealthy drinks like alchool is the way to stay healthy,.
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Good day, Sir [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. CamilleWhenever I have a symptom which lasts for more than a week, I always worry if It is a cancer.
>> CORRECT! I don\'t know why it comes up on my brain, I guess that it is the most serious and frightened disease that I know.
>> I don\'t know why it comes up on my brain, I guess that it is the most serious and frightening disease that I know.
Although, it\'s cure rate has been increasing, there are still a lot of people who die due to a cancer.
>> Although, its cure rate has been increasing, there are still a lot of people who die due to cancer.
OR >> Although, its treatment rate has been increasing, there are still a lot of people who die due to cancer.
The incidence rate of cancer has been increasing due to the bad diet and the improvement of disgnostic technologies.
>> The incidence rate of cancer has been increasing due to bad diet and the improvement of diagnostic technologies.
I am scared if I have a cancer and it is impossible to control pain, I would like to be killed because the pain is horrible that patients can\'t endure without pain killer.
I am scared if I have a cancer and it is impossible to control pain, I would like to be killed because the pain is horrible that patients can\'t endure without pain killer.
>> I am scared if I have a cancer and it is impossible to control pain, I would like to be killed because the pain is horrible that patients can\'t endure without any pain killer.
I am not sure if I can manage my health mentally and physically.
>> CORRECT!
There are uncountable information to keep our health.
>> CORRECT!
We have seen it on TV, news papers and so on.
>> CORRECT!
However, it is nealy possible to keep right habits even thought, we know what we have to eat, drink and do.
>> However, it is nearly possible to keep right habits even thought, we know what we have to eat, drink and do.
Eating healthy food, doing exercise regulary and avoiding unhealthy drinks like alchool is the way to stay healthy.
>> CORRECT!
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