What do children do at a playground? / What do you play with your friends at a playground?
학생이 쓴 원문
Children usually take rides in the playground. For example, rides are a jungle gym, slide, swing. And they play with some sand, making sand cattle. Recently I don\'t go to the playground anymore but when I was going there I almost ride a slide or swing and my friends liked playing at a jungle gym. Sometimes we did games named red light green light, dabanggu and mafia. It\'s was fun.
강사 첨삭
Hi Risa,
Play is so essential for child development around the world. Playing in the playground is good for us. Play is critical for kids to develop the emotional, social, and creative thinking skills they’ll need when they’re adults. Playing in the playground allows children to engage with their surrounding environment and with others in their community in a fun context. It enables the children to explore ideas and different ways to behave, testing their boundaries and growing in the process. ~ Teacher QUENNY. Have a great weekend..
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Children usually take rides in the playground.
>> Children usually take rides and play on overhead equipment as well as climb trees in the playground.
For example, rides are a jungle gym, slide, swing.
>> Examples of equipment are swings, slides, see-saws, merry-go-round, playground climbers, and others.
And they play with some sand, making sand cattle.
>> And they can also play with the sandbox and make a sandcastle.
Recently I don\'t go to the playground anymore but when I was going there I almost ride a slide or swing and my friends liked playing at a jungle gym.
>> Recently I don\'t go to the playground anymore but when I was going there I almost ride a slide or swing and my friends liked playing at a jungle gym. (Correct)
Sometimes we did games named red light green light, dabanggu and mafia. It\'s was fun.
>> We sometimes played games named red light green light, dabanggu and mafia. It\'s was fun.
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Children usually take rides in the playground. For example, rides are a jungle gym, slide, swing. And they play with some sand, making sand cattle. Recently I don\'t go to the playground anymore but when I was going there I almost ride a slide or swing and my friends liked playing at a jungle gym. Sometimes we did games named red light green light, dabanggu and mafia. It\'s was fun.
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