What do scientists say about the influence of mobile phones on our health?
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Since lots of people at current society spends lots of time with smartphone, scientists have been raising the alarm about the risks of mobile phones.
>> Since lots of people at current society spend lots of time with smartphones, scientists have been raising the alarm about the risks of mobile phones.
EU Envronment Agency has said that long term use of mobile phone can cause brain cancer.
>> EU Environment Agency has said that long term use of mobile phones can cause brain cancer.
Watching down at phone while using it strains people\\\'s neck and it could cause nerve pains which expends back, shoulders, or down the arms.
>> Using phones strains people\'s necks and it could cause nerve pains which expends back, shoulders, or down the arms.
Also, blue light from the screen causes damage at health.
>> Also, the blue light from the screen damages health.
Blue light may contribute to heart disease, obesity, diabetes, and other health conditions.
>> The blue light may contribute to heart disease, obesity, diabetes, and other health conditions.
to prevent those, we could use mobile phone for limited times, and hold the phone properly.
>> To prevent those, we could use limit the use of our mobile phones and we should hold our phones properly.
also, we should not use phone at dark nighttime
>> Also, we should not use our phones in the dark.
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