What do the people in your community do for recreation?

2014-12-22 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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In my case, I am going a travel for refreshing of my mind. I insist that people have a hobby they really like. Now days, modern people are very busy and easily exposed to be stressed. People should have one more hobby for eliminating stress. Some people like doing excercise, some people like drinking, singing. We can have a lot of things to do, we keep trying to find something what I really like. I've been little suprised, in my company, around 100 Philliphine workers work here. I had a safety education with those guys, at that time, I was so suprised the workers from Philliphine are very looked happy and possitive to everything. They are always smiled but I had also the education with Korean or Chinese. They were never smiled.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Alex!   Thank you for sending in this composition. I appreciate your time and effort. I hope that you\'ll check the corrections below.   See you later!   ~Teacher Shanee   In my case, I am going a travel for refreshing of my mind. >>> In my case. I travel to relax my body and mind. I insist that people have a hobby they really like. >>> Correct! Now days, modern people are very busy and easily exposed to be stressed. >>> Nowadays, modern people are very busy and are easily exposed to stress. People should have one more hobby for eliminating stress. >>> People should have one more hobby to eleiminate stress. Some people like doing excercise, some people like drinking, singing. >>> Some people like doing exercises and others like drinking and singing. We can have a lot of things to do, we keep trying to find something what I really like. >>> We can have a lot of things to do. We just have to keep trying to find the things that we really like. I\'ve been little suprised, in my company, around 100 Philliphine workers work here. >>> I\'ve been a little bit surprised when I found out that there are around 100 Filipino workers in my company. I had a safety education with those guys, at that time, I was so suprised the workers from Philliphine are very looked happy and possitive to everything. >>> I had a safety education with those guys and at that time, I was so surprised that these Filipino workers looked very happy and seemed to be positive in everything. They are always smiled but I had also the education with Korean or Chinese. >>> They always smiled. I also had the lecture with Koreans and Chinese. They were never smiled. >>> However, they never smiled.

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