What do think are the reasons people dance?
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I think that people dance because of enjoying. People usually dance in big events like party. And they can also perform elegant and beauty with dancing. So, I think that people dance for their elegant and beauty.
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Here\'s your edited composition, [이름]! I like your answer. I can almost imagine people dancing elegantly and beautifully at a formal party! What a lovely sight!
Cheers,
Jean~~
I think that people dance because of enjoying.
>> I think that people dance because of enjoyment.
People usually dance in big events like party. And they can also perform elegant and beauty with dancing.
>> People usually dance at big events like parties. And they can also dance elegantly and beautifully.
So, I think that people dance for their elegant and beauty.
>> So, I think that people dance for elegance and beauty.
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