What do you and your family like to do together
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I live with my wife and a pet dog in apartment now. Because my older child lives in another city after marriage, and my second child lives apart from my house. My second child will get marriage in next year. I usually have all the time with my wife after first retirement. we like to go for walk 2~4 hours along with Han Liver and promenade. Sometimes my dog accompanies a walk. But he doesn\'t want to walk for long time. He seems uncomfortable physically to walk for long time, because of old age. I will travel the world with my lovely wife after 4~5 years later. We will retire one more time from current job. We plan a cruise travel. I hope there will be no global issues like Corona at that time.
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I live with my wife and a pet dog in apartment now.
>> I live with my wife and a pet dog in an apartment now, because my children live far away from us.
Because my older child lives in another city after marriage, and my second child lives apart from my house.
>> I live with my wife and a pet dog in an apartment now, because my children live far away from us.
My second child will get marriage in next year.
>> My second child will get married next year.
I usually have all the time with my wife after first retirement.
>> I usually have all the time with my wife after my first retirement.
we like to go for walk 2~4 hours along with Han Liver and promenade.
>> We like to go for walk for 2~4 hours along the Han River.
Sometimes my dog accompanies a walk.
>> Sometimes our dog accompanies us in our walk, but he doesn\'t want to walk for a long time.
But he doesn\'t want to walk for long time.
>> Sometimes our dog accompanies us in our walk, but he doesn\'t want to walk for a long time.
He seems uncomfortable physically to walk for long time, because of old age.
>> CORRECT!
I will travel the world with my lovely wife after 4~5 years later.
>> I will travel the world with my lovely wife after 4~5 years later.
We will retire one more time from current job.
We plan a cruise travel.
>> We planned a cruise travel.
I hope there will be no global issues like Corona at that time.
>> CORRECT!
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