What do you consider to be the single most important societal problem? Why? Answer in not more than

2017-09-28 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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As increasing societal problem such as overwhelming wedding cost, reducing birth rate and a lot of house poor, most of the man and woman in their late of 20s and early of 30s are considering to be a single these days. The most important reason is changing young people’s life style and values as comparing previous generation. They don’t want to be a bread earner under the responsibility anymore. They pursue to live more active and free as well as gain their reputation and career in their field. I don’t aim to be a single but understand these young people’s trend in their life style.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! I think that poverty still remains to be one of the most important societal problem. The lacking of basic needs like clothing, shelter, food, health facilities, limited resources and low standard of living which cannot fulfill the basic human needs. Currently in India, Pakistan and other countries around the globe, poverty is a major social problem. Poverty can cause and leads the people to corruption, bribe, diseases, lack of education, domestic abuse, parental issues, unemployment, drug abuse and other illegal activities. It is appalling, isn\'t it?

As increasing societal problem such as overwhelming wedding cost, reducing birth rate and a lot of house poor, most of the man and woman in their late of 20s and early of 30s are considering to be a single these days.
>>As societal problems arise such as overwhelming wedding costs, reduced birth rates and homelessness, many men and women in early 20\'s and 30\'s just want to remain single these days.

The most important reason is changing young people’s life style and values as comparing previous generation.
>>The main reason is the changing lifestyle of the modern people in the society.
They don’t want to be a bread earner under the responsibility anymore.
>>They don\'t want to be bread winners and avoid responsibilities.
They pursue to live more active and free as well as gain their reputation and career in their field.
>>They pursue the life they want for themselves.
I don’t aim to be a single but understand these young people’s trend in their life style.  

>>I don\'t want to be single forever but I understand the modern people\'s lifestyle because I belong to the same generation.

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