What do you contribute back to society

2020-02-07 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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Society gave me a alot of chnce to learn, communicate, care for my health, be secure, and slove many peoblems. After few years, If I set up my life such as get a job, get marry, have a child, and get old. I will donate to the society and to be a vouluntier.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Ms. [이름]! I appreciate this. Let\'s try to talk about it more in class. Enjoy your morning! ^^

~T.Avery

Society gave me a alot of chnce to learn, communicate, care for my health, be secure, and slove many peoblems.

>> Society gave me a alot of chances to learn, communicate, care for my health, be secure, and solve many problems.

After few years, If I set up my life such as get a job, get marry, have a child, and get old. I will donate to the society and to be a vouluntier.

>> After a few years, once I settle in life, get a job, get married, have a child, and get old, I will donate to society and be a volunteer.

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