What do you do for good health?
학생이 쓴 원문
I usually do working-out at gim in my workplace. and also, I go climbing two ro three times a month. Furthermore, I control how much alcohole I take at every dirinking party. also, I really care about not only food like instant and fast food but also salt and suger which should be controled. Among these things, the best one for recomanding is exercising. I have been doing working out for almost 10 years regularly since I was in military. At that time, I was very weak and not a strong. so, I started working out. that is a background of starting execising first. Recently, I have been interesing in going climbing. So, I went many mounitain in Korea. I can get some vital power from mountain every time I go climbing. but I think that the most important thing for good health is dite.
강사 첨삭
Sir Daniel, thank you for sharing your ways for getting good health.
I agree that hiking is really interesting.
There is no beauty comparable to nature.
Also, your ways are good to ensure balance in your life.
Commendable. :)
See you in class,
T.Risa
I usually do working-out at gim in my workplace.
>>I usually work out at the gym in my office.
and also, I go climbing two ro three times a month.
>>And also, I climb two to three times a month.
>>And also, I hike two to three time a month.
Furthermore, I control how much alcohole I take at every dirinking party.
>>Furthermore, I control my alcohol intake in every drinking party I attend.
also, I really care about not only food like instant and fast food but also salt and suger which should be controled.
>>I am also careful with eating instant food, eating at fast foods, and consumption of salt and sugar.
Among these things, the best one for recomanding is exercising.
>>Among these things, the best to maintain is exercise.
I have been doing working out for almost 10 years regularly since I was in military.
>>I have been working out for almost 10 years since I was in the military.
At that time, I was very weak and not a strong.
>>At that time, I was very weak.
>>At that time, I was not that strong.
so, I started working out.
>>So I started working out.
that is a background of starting execising first.
>>That is my reason for working out.
Recently, I have been interesing in going climbing.
>>Recently, I have been interested in hiking.
So, I went many mounitain in Korea.
>>So I hiked many mountains here in Korea.
I can get some vital power from mountain every time I go climbing.
>>I get some vital strength from climbing mountains.
but I think that the most important thing for good health is dite.
>>But I think that the most important way to get good health is proper diet.
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