What do you do for good health?

2013-05-30 · 첨삭 강사 Risa

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I usually do working-out at gim in my workplace. and also, I go climbing two ro three times a month. Furthermore, I control how much alcohole I take at every dirinking party. also, I really care about not only food like instant and fast food but also salt and suger which should be controled. Among these things, the best one for recomanding is exercising. I have been doing working out for almost 10 years regularly since I was in military. At that time, I was very weak and not a strong. so, I started working out. that is a background of starting execising first. Recently, I have been interesing in going climbing. So, I went many mounitain in Korea. I can get some vital power from mountain every time I go climbing. but I think that the most important thing for good health is dite.

강사 첨삭

Sir Daniel, thank you for sharing your ways for getting good health. I agree that hiking is really interesting. There is no beauty comparable to nature. Also, your ways are good to ensure balance in your life. Commendable. :)   See you in class, T.Risa   I usually do working-out at gim in my workplace. >>I usually work out at the gym in my office. and also, I go climbing two ro three times a month. >>And also, I climb two to three times a month. >>And also, I hike two to three time a month. Furthermore, I control how much alcohole I take at every dirinking party. >>Furthermore, I control my alcohol intake in every drinking party I attend. also, I really care about not only food like instant and fast food but also salt and suger which should be controled. >>I am also careful with eating instant food, eating at fast foods, and consumption of salt and sugar. Among these things, the best one for recomanding is exercising. >>Among these things, the best to maintain is exercise. I have been doing working out for almost 10 years regularly since I was in military. >>I have been working out for almost 10 years since I was in the military. At that time, I was very weak and not a strong. >>At that time, I was very weak. >>At that time, I was not that strong. so, I started working out. >>So I started working out. that is a background of starting execising first. >>That is my reason for working out. Recently, I have been interesing in going climbing. >>Recently, I have been interested in hiking. So, I went many mounitain in Korea. >>So I hiked many mountains here in Korea. I can get some vital power from mountain every time I go climbing. >>I get some vital strength from climbing mountains. but I think that the most important thing for good health is dite. >>But I think that the most important way to get good health is proper diet.

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