What do you do on chusuck? (part 2)

2019-09-22 · 첨삭 강사 Matt

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The shirt-jacket is very colorful. Mostly, the shirt-jacket is long sleeved. So, you wear it when it is cold. When girls wear long dresses, boys wear pants. A long time ago, everybody wore Hanbok everyday! But now, we were it when it is a special day in Korea. In conclusion we eat special foods, bow and get money, and were Hanbok.I saw my grandmother on Chusuk. It was very fun, except the part when I vomited after l drank my lemonade. What did you do on Chusuk?

강사 첨삭

Hello, Rose. Thank you for sending this in. I am happy to hear about your Chuseok holiday. I mostly slept and ate and did household chores. Haha. Have a great one ahead. See you in class.
T.Matt
The shirt-jacket is very colorful.
>>Correct
Mostly, the shirt-jacket is long sleeved.
>>Correct
So, you wear it when it is cold.
>>Correct
When girls wear long dresses, boys wear pants.
>>Correct
OR 
>> While girls wear long dresses, boys wear pants.
A long time ago, everybody wore Hanbok everyday!
>>Correct
But now, we were it when it is a special day in Korea.
>>However, nowadays, we only wear it during special days in Korea.
In conclusion we eat special foods, bow and get money, and were Hanbok.
>>In conclusion, we eat special foods, bow to our elders, get money and wear Hanbok.
I saw my grandmother on Chusuk.
>>I saw my grandmother on Chuseok.
It was very fun, except the part when I vomited after l drank my lemonade. 
>>Correct
OR
 >> It was fun except the part when I threw up after drinking my lemonade.
What did you do on Chusuk?
>>Correct
OR >> What did you do during Chuseok?

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