What do you do to loosen up after a busy exhausting day?

2023-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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What do you do to loosen up after a busy exhausting day? When I worked, I’m very busy everyday in the hospital. And I have compensation mentality always. So, after busy day, I ate too much due to stress. and then I felt like better. But mu body was ruined. Thus, these days I walk on the street/park with playing music or with my puppy. And if possible, I go work out five times a week. After doing that, I have quite recovered from fatigue. From now on, I get a job again and I will go to work out continuously!

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this [이름] [이름]. Good luck with this journey of working on your better self. Like you, I also try my best to work out after work. Let\'s do this!

When I worked, I’m very busy everyday in the hospital. And I have compensation mentality always.
>>> When I worked, I was very busy everyday in the hospital and I have always compromised my mentality.
So, after busy day, I ate too much due to stress. and then I felt like better. But mu body was ruined. 
>>> So after a busy day, I ate too much due to stress and then I seemed to feel better but my body was ruined. 
Thus, these days I walk on the street/park with playing music or with my puppy. 
>>> Thus, these days I walk on the street/park while playing music or with my puppy. 
And if possible, I go work out five times a week. 
>>> correct
After doing that, I have quite recovered from fatigue.
>>> correct
From now on, I get a job again and I will go to work out continuously!
>>> From now on, if I get a job again, I will go work out continuously!

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