What do you do to relieve your stress?

2010-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 lynn

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To beat stress I will surround myself with family and friends who love me and encourage me all the time.They would help me get throungh any difficult times and I get so much confidence from them.I would also enjoy my hobby.Since I was so young,I usually released my stress playing musical instrument like recorder,piano and flute.After I play especially the piano for 2 or 3hours without any thinking,I feel very comfortable and fresh having no stress.I also like music so I usaully listen to pop music or go to singing room with my friends and have a lot of fun.I sometimes climb up the mountain near my house with my mother,it also helps to blow off the stress.If I put these three measures in place,I will able to reduce any possibility of harm which stress can cause.

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Thanks again for your composition [이름]! Great job and Carry on! here are some suggestions for improvement: To beat stress I will surround myself with family and friends who love me and encourage me all the time. >>> Correct They would help me get throungh any difficult times and I get so much confidence from them. >>> They would help me (to) get through any difficult times and I get so much confidence from them. I would also enjoy my hobby.Since I was so young,I usually released my stress playing musical instrument like recorder,piano and flute. >>>Since I was so young,I usually released my stress playing musical instruments like the piano and the flute. After I play especially the piano for 2 or 3hours without any thinking,I feel very comfortable and fresh having no stress. >>>Correct I also like music so I usaully listen to pop music or go to singing room with my friends and have a lot of fun. >>>I also like music so I usually listen to pop music or go to singing rooms with my friends and have a lot of fun. I sometimes climb up the mountain near my house with my mother,it also helps to blow off the stress. >>>Correct If I put these three measures in place,I will able to reduce any possibility of harm which stress can cause. >>>Correct and very good sentence! =)

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