What do you do when you encounter obstacles to success?

2017-11-14 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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When I have some trouble achieving my aim, I often make a schedule to spend without regrets. before planning somethings, I pondered that what is a obstacle for my dreams. And then I adjusted my schedules more effective. Throughout repeating this way, I makes an effort to keep challenge for my dream contiually like a managing my health and keeping study english. but sometimes some events make me exhausted. At that time I couldn`t do anything. so when that time, I just throw a towel for that day. In my case, When I can`t do what I plans by the few reason, I forget to do in a day. It suit way for me to maintain condition. After disappearing distracting thoughts, I can keep going reach my aim.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for writing this essay JM.

I hope you could check the corrections below.

Take note of the corrections and improve your writing skills. See you tomorrow.

~Teacher Shanee^^,


When I have some trouble achieving my aim, I often make a schedule to spend without regrets.

>>> When I have some trouble in achieving my aim, I make some plans and put these plans into action.

before planning somethings, I pondered that what is a obstacle for my dreams.

>>> Before planning some things, I ponder on the possible obstacle I might encounter.

And then I adjusted my schedules more effective.

>>> And then, I adjust my schedule.

Throughout repeating this way, I makes an effort to keep challenge for my dream contiually like a managing my health and keeping study english.

>>> By doing this repeatedly, I overcome the challenges I encounter. 
 but sometimes some events make me exhausted.

>>> But sometimes, some events make me exhausted.

At that time I couldn`t do anything.

>>> Correct!

so when that time, I just throw a towel for that day.

>>> In that case, I just throw in the towel.

In my case, When I can`t do what I plans by the few reason, I forget to do in a day.

>>> When I can\'t do what I planned for the day for some reason, I just put it off for a day.

It suit way for me to maintain condition. 

>>> That is a good way for me to maintain a good condition.
After disappearing distracting thoughts, I can keep going reach my aim.

>>> After the distracting thoughts are gone, I can work toward my goals.

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