What do you enjoy the most about going on a trip?

2019-08-01 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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There are several things I love when I go to the trip. First, I feel interesting when I find regional characteristic. For example, Americans are good at greeting to strangers, Gangwon-province residents are tend to acting slowly so on. After finding that, I sometimes think about the reasons, or compare it with my country\'s culture. Through this thinking, I felt like that I understand more about the region. Second, I love to go to the observatory in the city especially in case of the foriegn country. Because I felt like more close with the city when I go on the observatory deck. Third, I love to go to the library when I visit the foriegn country for relatively long times. It because I love library. Fourth, waliking at the outside or sitting in the cafe to feel the city\'s mood. I think, these all things can be summarized as \'finding new things that I haven\'t experenced before and feeling it deeply\'. It\'s the reason why we go to trip - not just for looking beautiful things.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! thank you for this. That a good way to put it. I agree, when you visit a place, experiencing the place to the fullest is necessary.
- T. Beth
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There are several things I love when I go to the trip. 
>>> correct.
>>> OR: There are several things I love when I go on a trip.   
First, I feel interesting when I find regional characteristic. 
>>>  First, it feels interesting when I find regional characteristic. 
>>> OR: First, I feel interested finding local characteristic. 
For example, Americans are good at greeting to strangers, Gangwon-province residents are tend to acting slowly so on. 
>>>  For example, Americans are good at greeting strangers, whereas Gangwon-province residents tend to be timid and so on.  
After finding that, I sometimes think about the reasons, or compare it with my country\'s culture. 
>>> correct.
>>> OR: After knowing about that, I sometimes think about the reasons, or compare it with my country\'s culture.   
Through this thinking, I felt like that I understand more about the region. 
>>>  Through this thinking, I felt like I understand more about the region.  
>>> OR:  Through this thinking, I felt that I understand more about the region.  
Second, I love to go to the observatory in the city especially in case of the foriegn country. 
>>> Second, I love to go to the observatory in the city especially when I am in a foreign country.   
Because I felt like more close with the city when I go on the observatory deck. 
>>>   Because I feel closer to the city when I go on the observatory deck. 
Third, I love to go to the library when I visit the foriegn country for relatively long times. 
>>>  Third, I love to go to the library when I visit the foreign country for relatively long times. 
It because I love library. 
>>> It is because I love libraries.
Fourth, waliking at the outside or sitting in the cafe to feel the city\'s mood.
>>>   Fourth, walking outside or sitting in the cafe to feel the city\'s mood.
I think, these all things can be summarized as \'finding new things that I haven\'t experenced before and feeling it deeply\'. 
>>>   I think, all these things can be summarized as \'finding new things that I haven\'t experienced before and feeling it deeply\'. 
It\'s the reason why we go to trip - not just for looking beautiful things.
>>>  It\'s the reason why we go to trips - not just for looking at beautiful things. 

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