What do you expect from the university?
학생이 쓴 원문
I expect growth in my innermost self from Daybreak university. I just want to be a good person who knows myself. Humans want to see, hear, and speak what they want. It can relate to their relationship with people. It also affects their life. I want to have an awareness of them. Because I want to see, hear, and speak what God wants me to do. Even though I\'m struggling with them deeply by myself, I can not be perfect. So I need to study more. That\'s why I want to study at this university. I love people but I don\'t know how to love people with God\'s love. I think, first of all, I have to understand myself. And then, I can have a good relationship with people. Especially I want to be a good mom to my daughter. I would like to understand her and have a good relationship with her well. Furthermore, at this university, you can learn counseling in Korean. Because most of them are Korean. I can freely express my opinion in Korean. Also, I can have Korean classmates. It will be very exciting! ^^
강사 첨삭
That\'s what I like about you, Jane! You always have a good heart. God bless your more! Way to go!-Faith-
I expect growth in my innermost self from Daybreak university. >> I expect growth in my innermost self from Daybreak University.
I just want to be a good person who knows myself.
>> CORRECT
OR I would just like to be a good person who understands myself better.
Humans want to see, hear, and speak what they want.
>> CORRECT
It can relate to their relationship with people. It also affects their life.
>> It\'s because it can relate to their relationship with people.
It also affects their life.
>> CORRECT
I want to have an awareness of them. Because I want to see, hear, and speak what God wants me to do.
>> In fact, I want to have awareness of them because I want to see, hear, and speak what God wants me to do.
Even though I\'m struggling with them deeply by myself, I can not be perfect.
>> Even though I\'m struggling with them deeply by myself, I cannot be perfect.
So I need to study more. That\'s why I want to study at this university.
>> So, I need to study more from this university.
OR So, I want to learn more in this university.
I love people but I don\'t know how to love people with God\'s love.
>> CORRECT
OR I love people but I don\'t know how to show it in God\'s way.
I think, first of all, I have to understand myself.
>> CORRECT
And then, I can have a good relationship with people.
>> CORRECT
OR Through that, I can build a good relationship others.
Especially I want to be a good mom to my daughter.
>> Especially, I want to be a good mom to my daughter.
OR More importantly, I would like to set myself as a good example to my daughter.
I would like to understand her and have a good relationship with her well.
>> I would like to understand her and have a very good relationship with her.
Furthermore, at this university, you can learn counseling in Korean. Because most of them are Korean.
>> Furthermore, in this university, you can learn counseling in Korean because most of them are Koreans.
I can freely express my opinion in Korean.
>> Certainly, I can freely express my opinion in Korean.
Also, I can have Korean classmates.
>> CORRECT
OR Also, having Korean classmates is the icing on the cake.
It will be very exciting! ^^
>> CORRECT
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