what do you have to do now?
학생이 쓴 원문
I usually do many works at home and at work.
I am not a full-time housewife but a working mom.
At work, I have to manage diverse works about school everyday.
This afternoon, we will have meeting with parents who are school representative.
At home, I have to take care of my family and dogs.
Also It is important that I take care of mt health and my mind.
I excise for my health for 30 minutes and play the flute for about 40 minutes.
I am thankful that I can do many roles in my life.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
Thank you for the homework!
Have a nice day!
Teacher Elly.
what do you have to do now?
I usually do many works at home and at work.
>>I usually do many tasks at home and at work.
I am not a full-time housewife but a working mom.
CORRECT!
or>>I am not just a housewife but also a working mom.
At work, I have to manage diverse works about school everyday.
>>At work, I have to manage diverse tasks about school every day.
This afternoon, we will have meeting with parents who are school representative.
>>This afternoon, we will have a meeting with the parents, who will act as the school representatives.
At home, I have to take care of my family and dogs.
CORRECT!
or>>At home, I am in charge of taking care of my family and my dogs.
Also It is important that I take care of mt health and my mind.
>>Also, It is important that I have to take care of my mental and physical health.
I excise for my health for 30 minutes and play the flute for about 40 minutes.
>>I exercise for 30 minutes to maintain my health. And, I play the flute for about 40 minutes.
I am thankful that I can do many roles in my life.
>>I am thankful that I can assume many kinds of roles in life.
Thank you for the homework!
Have a nice day!
Teacher Elly.
what do you have to do now?
I usually do many works at home and at work.
>>I usually do many tasks at home and at work.
I am not a full-time housewife but a working mom.
CORRECT!
or>>I am not just a housewife but also a working mom.
At work, I have to manage diverse works about school everyday.
>>At work, I have to manage diverse tasks about school every day.
This afternoon, we will have meeting with parents who are school representative.
>>This afternoon, we will have a meeting with the parents, who will act as the school representatives.
At home, I have to take care of my family and dogs.
CORRECT!
or>>At home, I am in charge of taking care of my family and my dogs.
Also It is important that I take care of mt health and my mind.
>>Also, It is important that I have to take care of my mental and physical health.
I excise for my health for 30 minutes and play the flute for about 40 minutes.
>>I exercise for 30 minutes to maintain my health. And, I play the flute for about 40 minutes.
I am thankful that I can do many roles in my life.
>>I am thankful that I can assume many kinds of roles in life.
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