What do you have to say about teenage pregnancy?

2018-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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Is early and unplanned pregnancy frowned upon your country? Having a baby early is not a easy to manage mom's mind well. When teenager moms realize that they have a baby, they might be embarrassed, scared and worried about the eyes of the close people. I am not sure that they can raise their child well without enough money and the interest of the parents. Because parents is not ready to accept their situation and they might think babies are not more important than themselves. The most people in my country consider unplanned pregnancy as a accident or careless. That's why teenager moms would like to hide their circumstance. It is time to change our people's awareness and values.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]!

Unintended pregnancy is one that was either mistimed or unwanted. It\'s time for us to take a step and educate people about this hot issue in our society. Giving a birth and raising a child is tough but it also takes two responsible people to fight for it. Great composition! ^^

~Teacher Eunice

Is early and unplanned pregnancy frowned upon your country?
>> Correct!
Having a baby early is not a easy to manage mom\'s mind well.

>> Having a baby at an early age leads to uneasy mind set of the mother.

When teenager moms realize that they have a baby, they might be embarrassed, scared and worried about the eyes of the close people.
>> When teenager moms realize that they are expecting a baby, they might be embarrassed, scared and worried about what other people will say. 

I am not sure that they can raise their child well without enough money and the interest of the parents.

>> I am not sure that they can raise their child well without enough money and if they can be able to support their parents.

Because parents is not ready to accept their situation and they might think babies are not more important than themselves.
>> Because parents is not ready to accept their situation and they might think that the babies are not important than themselves. 

The most people in my country consider unplanned pregnancy as a accident or careless.

>> Most of the people in my country consider unplanned pregnancy as an accident or a result of a careless decision.

That\'s why teenager moms would like to hide their circumstance.

>> That\'s why teenager moms would like to hide their circumstances.
It is time to change our people\'s awareness and values.

>> Correct!


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