What do you imagine are the best countries in which to raise a child?

2021-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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I think Korea is one of the best couneries to raise a child. Because Korean education system is good and Korean parents have a lot of concern for education of their children. So Korean children can get much education. Also, Korea is good for security. So we can raise our children in safe environment. I know there are many countries having good education system like Poland, Canada etc. If I have enough money, I maybe send my children to these contries for education. But I wanna have a good time with my children for long time. I think it\'s important to children having the time with parents.

강사 첨삭

Hi again Jennifer! 
Thank you for your time in writing your homework :) 

I think Korea is one of the best couneries to raise a child.
>>> I think Korea is one of the best countries to raise children.
Because Korean education system is good and Korean parents have a lot of concern for education of their children.
>>> Because the Korean education system is good and Korean parents are very interested in their children\'s education.
So Korean children can get much education.
>>> CORRECT!
Also, Korea is good for security.
>>> CORRECT!
So we can raise our children in safe environment.
>>> So we can raise our children in a safe environment.
I know there are many countries having good education system like Poland, Canada etc.
>>> CORRECT!
If I have enough money, I maybe send my children to these contries for education.
>>> CORRECT!
But I wanna have a good time with my children for long time.
>>> But I wanna have a good time with my children for a long time.
I think it\'s important to children having the time with parents.
>>> I think it is important for children to spend time with their parents.

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