What do you know about iodine deficiency?
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Hello Sir [이름]!
Thank you for enlightening me by explaining about iodine deficiency well. I think women are prone to this problem. Pregnant women have a high risk of developing this and can cause to serious problems such as mental retardation in infants or children. A proper source of iodine can prevent this deficiency.
~T. Eunice
I know that iodine deficiency can lead to enlargement of the thyroid.
>> Correct!
It also lead to a problem of eyes, oral cavity, skin, cervix and prostate.
>> It also leads a problem to the eyes, oral cavity, skin, cervix and prostate.
We can take it from the food like seaweed or multi vitamin.
>> We can take it from the food like seaweed or multi vitamins.
All women in Korea are eating seaweed soup for a month after delivering baby because they need to prevent them from the iodine deficiency.
>> All women in Korea are eating seaweed soup for a month after delivering a baby because they need it to prevent them from iodine deficiency.
There are symptoms of an iodine deficiency such as swelling in the neck, unexpected weight gain and hair loss.
>> Correct!
If they feel having a symptom mentioned above, they need to intake recommended iodine from the good sources.
>> Correct!
It can be seaweed, yogurt, eggs, and tuna.
>> Correct!
>> OR: Seaweed, yogurt, eggs, and tuna are good sources of iodine.
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