What do you know about iodine deficiency?

2018-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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I know that iodine deficiency can lead to enlargement of the thyroid. It also lead to a problem of eyes, oral cavity, skin, cervix and prostate. We can take it from the food like seaweed or multi vitamin. All women in Korea are eating seaweed soup for a month after delivering baby because they need to prevent them from the iodine deficiency. There are symptoms of an iodine deficiency such as swelling in the neck, unexpected weight gain and hair loss. If they feel having a symptom mentioned above, they need to intake recommended iodine from the good sources. It can be seaweed, yogurt, eggs, and tuna.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]!

Thank you for enlightening me by explaining about iodine deficiency well. I think women are prone to this problem. Pregnant women have a high risk of developing this and can cause to serious problems such as mental retardation in infants or children. A proper source of iodine can prevent this deficiency.

~T. Eunice


I know that iodine deficiency can lead to enlargement of the thyroid.

>> Correct!
It also lead to a problem of eyes, oral cavity, skin, cervix and prostate.

>> It also leads a problem to the eyes, oral cavity, skin, cervix and prostate.

We can take it from the food like seaweed or multi vitamin.
 
>> We can take it from the food like seaweed or multi vitamins.

All women in Korea are eating seaweed soup for a month after delivering baby because they need to prevent them from the iodine deficiency.
>> All women in Korea are eating seaweed soup for a month after delivering a baby because they need it to prevent them from iodine deficiency.

There are symptoms of an iodine deficiency such as swelling in the neck, unexpected weight gain and hair loss.

>> Correct!

If they feel having a symptom mentioned above, they need to intake recommended iodine from the good sources.
>> Correct!

It can be seaweed, yogurt, eggs, and tuna.

>> Correct!

>> OR: Seaweed, yogurt, eggs, and tuna are good sources of iodine.


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