what do you like about social networking sites?

I am used to searching for something what I curious on Naver or Daum. Both of them are the most famous and smart searching engine in my country. There are the main characters which named Line Friends and Cacao Friends of each company. They develop a lot of invisible profit and create numerous jobs, also be changing our life style. These days, we check the temperature before going outside, invest our money in our places without move one step at all, make foreign friends without go abroad etc. I like the fact that SNS would change our life better and simpler. But one of the things that I hate about SNS is that I have become fat because it makes me lazy.

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what do you like about social networking sites?

I am used to searching for something what I curious on Naver or Daum.

>>I am used to searching for something that I am curious about on Naver or Daum.

Both of them are the most famous and smart searching engine in my country.

>>Both of them are the most famous and smartest search engines in my country.

There are the main characters which named Line Friends and Cacao Friends of each company.

>> Line Friends and Cacao Friends are the main characters which represent each of these companies.

They develop a lot of invisible profit and create numerous jobs, also be changing our life style.

>>They generated a lot of invisible profits and created numerous jobs. Also, they changed our lifestyles.

These days, we check the temperature before going outside, invest our money in our places without move one step at all, make foreign friends without go abroad etc.

>>These days, we check the temperature before going outside, we invest our money in places without having to move one step at all, we make foreign friends without going abroad, etc.

I like the fact that SNS would change our life better and simpler.

>>I like the fact that SNS can change our lives in a better and simpler way.

But one of the things I hate about SNS is that, I have become fat because it makes me lazy.

CORRECT!

or>>One things I detest about SNS is that. I became fat because it encourages me to be lazy.