What do you like do doing your free time
학생이 쓴 원문
I like listening music at my free time. I like k-pop music. So when I get a free time, I\'m lie down my bed and listen to K-pop music. Now, my favorite K-pop music is weeekly- After school. Because, this song is about high school life. So, When I listen this music,, I can feel and re[이름]d my happy high school life.
And I like playing with my friends at my free time. My friends are kind and funny. So when I meet my friends, my feeling is very comfortable and happy. Now, on account of COVID virus, we can meet only four friends at the same time. And, next week, we should meet only 2 friends after 6 a clock. If COVID virus done, I will meet many friends at the same time and go trip with my friends.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]ji!
Wow! I\'m glad to know all these things. I also like listening to the K-pop music. I appreciate your effort in making a composition. GREAT COMPOSITION! Keep it up!
Let\'s talk more about this next time :)
Thank you and have a wonderful weekend~ ^^
~T. Roanne ^_^
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Suggestions and Corrections:
>> I like listening to music in my free time.
2.I like k-pop music.
>> CORRECT! OR I like the K-pop music.
3. So when I get a free time, I\'m lie down my bed and listen to K-pop music.
>> So when I get a free time, I lie down on my bed and listen to the K-pop music.
4. Now, my favorite K-pop music is weeekly- After school.
>> CORRECT! OR Now, my favorite K-pop music is weekly from After school.
5. Because, this song is about high school life.
>> Because this song is about high school life.
6. So, When I listen this music,, I can feel and re[이름]d my happy high school life.
>> So, When I listen to this music, It can make me feel happy and re[이름]ds me of my happy life in high school.
7. And I like playing with my friends at my free time.
>> And I like playing with my friends in my free time.
8. My friends are kind and funny.
>> CORRECT!
9. So when I meet my friends, my feeling is very comfortable and happy.
>> So when I meet my friends, I feel very comfortable and happy.
10. Now, on account of COVID virus, we can meet only four friends at the same time.
>> Now, on account of the COVID virus, we can only meet with four friends at the same time.
11. And, next week, we should meet only 2 friends after 6 a clock.
>> Next week, we should only meet with 2 friends after 6 a clock.
12. If COVID virus done, I will meet many friends at the same time and go trip with my friends.
>> If the COVID virus is done, I will meet many friends at the same time and go on a trip with them.
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