What do you like most about your room? Why?

2024-12-31 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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My favorite things in my room are the makeup table and bed. The reason I like the makeup table and bed the most is because it\'s my first makeup table and bed. Actually, the bed is a strange bed with no frame and only a mattress. It is a makeup table and bed that I have as I live alone away from my family because of work. Before I became independent, I lived without my own makeup table and bed, but I got my own makeup table and bed! I think it\'s better because I don\'t have to rent my mom\'s makeup table, and I don\'t have to sleep in one room with my family, and I also feel a lot of comfort. In addition, when I grow up and become an adult, my dream was to do makeup on my own makeup table someday and wake up in a pretty bed like a Disney princess\' bed and decorate my bed, but I feel that my dream has come true, so I like my makeup table and bed.

강사 첨삭

Hi!

Thank you for sharing your answer.
It was nice that your favorite things in your room really hold significant meanings; I think especially the symbol of you being an adult as well as being independent. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


My favorite things in my room are the makeup table and bed.
>> CORRECT.
The reason I like the makeup table and bed the most is because it\'s my first makeup table and bed.
>> CORRECT.
Actually, the bed is a strange bed with no frame and only a mattress.
>> CORRECT.
It is a makeup table and bed that I have as I live alone away from my family because of work.
>> I have a makeup table and bed because I live alone, away from my family due to work.
Before I became independent, I lived without my own makeup table and bed, but I got my own makeup table and bed!
>> CORRECT.
I think it\'s better because I don\'t have to rent my mom\'s makeup table, and I don\'t have to sleep in one room with my family, and I also feel a lot of comfort.
>> I think it\'s better because I don\'t have to borrow my mom\'s makeup table, I don\'t have to sleep in the same room with my family, and I also feel much more comfortable.
In addition, when I grow up and become an adult, my dream was to do makeup on my own makeup table someday and wake up in a pretty bed like a Disney princess\' bed and decorate my bed, but I feel that my dream has come true, so I like my makeup table and bed.
>> In addition, when I grew up, my dream was to do my makeup on my own makeup table someday and wake up in a pretty bed, like a Disney princess\'s bed, and decorate it. Now that my dream has come true, I really love my makeup table and bed.

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