What do you like to do in your free time?
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to do something that makes my mind and body comfortable together in my free time.
But even though my body is resting, I find myself my mind constantly thinks about something.
I don\'t know if I\'ll ever find a real rest which both my mind and body are comfortable while I\'m alive.
Because I feel more tired if the work that I thought was resting both in mind and body takes a little longer.
The free time I want doesn\'t matter what I do, but it\'s the time when I can do what comes to mind.
Time to control my rest and tension and doing what comes to mind right away, that\'s what I want to do in my free time.
강사 첨삭
Hi David, you’ve expressed your thoughts deeply and meaningfully! I made some corrections to improve clarity, sentence flow, and natural phrasing. Your writing effectively conveys the struggle of finding true rest, which makes it very relatable. Keep up the great work!
~ T. Lia
I want to do something that makes my mind and body comfortable together in my free time.
>> I want to do something that makes both my mind and body feel at ease in my free time.
But even though my body is resting, I find myself my mind constantly thinks about something.
>> But even when my body is resting, I find that my mind is constantly thinking about something.
I don\'t know if I\'ll ever find a real rest which both my mind and body are comfortable while I\'m alive.
>> I don\'t know if I\'ll ever experience true rest, where both my mind and body feel at ease, while I\'m alive.
Because I feel more tired if the work that I thought was resting both in mind and body takes a little longer.
>> In fact, I feel even more tired if an activity I thought would be restful for both my mind and body lasts too long.
The free time I want doesn\'t matter what I do, but it\'s the time when I can do what comes to mind.
>> The kind of free time I want isn’t about what I do, but about having the freedom to do whatever comes to mind.
Time to control my rest and tension and doing what comes to mind right away, that\'s what I want to do in my free time.
>> Having the ability to balance rest and tension while doing whatever comes to mind, that’s what I truly want in my free time.
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