What do you like to do outside of work?

2021-10-08 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Apart from work, I enjoy taking a stroll to nearby places. I usually have an hour-long walk to the nearby river or park. During this time, I can separate myself from workloads and free myself from various matters and concerns. I believe sparing my time for more physical activities made me mentally and physically healthy by relieving stresses from the daily routine. Due to the pandemic, I do not have a place for exercise. Accordingly, a walk was the only outdoor activity I could do at the beginning of the lockdowns. This hobby was crucial to me because I could keep myself away from burning out from many workloads. Physical strength enables me to withstand bombarding customer calls at my first job as a customer service associate. Walking allowed me to equip myself with persistency and mental toughness, which have prepared me to be flexible in the fast-paced global business market.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Aciel! Happy weekend!

Apart from work, I enjoy taking a stroll to nearby places. 
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I usually have an hour-long walk to the nearby river or park. 
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During this time, I can separate myself from workloads and free myself from various matters and concerns. 
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>>> OR: During this time, I can detach myself from workloads and free myself from various matters and concerns.  
I believe sparing my time for more physical activities made me mentally and physically healthy by relieving stresses from the daily routine. 
>>> correct   
Due to the pandemic, I do not have a place for exercise. 
>>> OR: Due to the pandemic, I do not have a place to exercise.  
Accordingly, a walk was the only outdoor activity I could do at the beginning of the lockdowns. 
>>> Accordingly, a walk was the only outdoor activity I could do at the beginning of the lockdown.   
This hobby was crucial to me because I could keep myself away from burning out from many workloads. 
>>> correct  
Physical strength enables me to withstand bombarding customer calls at my first job as a customer service associate. 
>>> correct  
Walking allowed me to equip myself with persistency and mental toughness, which have prepared me to be flexible in the fast-paced global business market.
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