What do you love the most about Chuseok?

2015-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Although my parents now live not far away from my house, I rarely visit my parents. My brothers and relatives live in Seoul and on the outskirt of Seoul. However, we do not get together often. Chuseok is a great time for all the family members and relatives gather together and catch up. We see each other only once or twice a year. There is a saying that better is a neighbor who is near than a distant brother. Even if we are a family, we do not get close if we do not see each other often. One of good things about Chuseok or new year’s day is that I used to visit my hometown when my parents lived there before moving to the current place. When I was younger, I didn’t feel anything special about my hometown, but as I am getting older, I feel a sense of nostalgia for my hometown. It reminds me of my younger days when I visit there. When I grew up, a lot of things happened: good or bad things. But even the difficult times became a part of my good memory. Chuseok is the time to reunite.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Sir [이름]!
What a great week! hihihi.

One more day before the weekend. I am sure you are excited to take a rest again.

Thanks for your composition.

I totally agree with you that during the big holidays in each country, it is also the best time for families and relatives to get together.

It is fun to see that all of you are happy doing things together such as eating, watching TV, chatting and so on.

Have a great day.
Teacher Nina


Although my parents now live not far away from my house, I rarely visit my parents.

>> Better: Although my parents now live not far away from my house, I rarely visit them.

My brothers and relatives live in Seoul and on the outskirt of Seoul.

>> correct

However, we do not get together often.

>> correct

>> OR: However, we seldom meet.

Chuseok is a great time for all the family members and relatives gather together and catch up.

>> correct

We see each other only once or twice a year.

>> correct

>> OR: We only see each other once or twice a year.

There is a saying that better is a neighbor who is near than a distant brother.

>> correct

Even if we are a family, we do not get close if we do not see each other often.

>> correct

One of good things about Chuseok or new year’s day is that I used to visit my hometown when my parents lived there before moving to the current place.

>> correct

>> Better: One of the good things about Chuseok or New Year’s Day is that I used to visit my hometown when my parents lived there before moving to the current place.

When I was younger, I didn’t feel anything special about my hometown, but as I am getting older, I feel a sense of nostalgia for my hometown.

>> correct

It reminds me of my younger days when I visit there. 

>> correct

When I grew up, a lot of things happened: good or bad things.

>> correct

But even the difficult times became a part of my good memory.

>> correct

Chuseok is the time to reunite.

>> correct

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