What do you love the most about family gatherings?

2016-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Even if my older brothers and their families including myself live within almost one hour driving distance from my parents’ place, we rarely get together. Chuseok, the Korean Thanks Giving Day, and Seolnal, the lunar new year, are the biggest holidays in Korea. We all get together in our parents’ house on the two occasions. Above all, gathering itself of all the family members is enjoyable and a good opportunity to catch up. On Chuseok, we make rice cakes and various pan cakes all together. Seeing my parents smiling when they watch us makes me feel happy as well. Family gatherings during the holidays are stress-free for most people. However, some people think that family gathering is unpleasant. If you are still single, your relatives won’t stop asking you about when you will get married. If you are married, they will keep asking you when you will have a baby.Sometimes these situations are small, unpleasant blips in otherwise enjoyable celebrations.

강사 첨삭

Chuseok holiday is coming. ^^ One of the big and great holiday will be held next week. ^^ Yahoo! A lot of people are so excited to spend time with their family, relatives and friends. ^^ I am excited to ehar your stories in class. See you in class Sir [이름]! ^^ Teacher Nina   Even if my older brothers and their families including myself live within almost one hour driving distance from my parents’ place, we rarely get together. >> correct Chuseok, the Korean Thanks Giving Day, and Seolnal, the lunar new year, are the biggest holidays in Korea. >> correct We all get together in our parents’ house on the two occasions. >> correct >> Better: We all get together in our parents’ house during those two occasions. Above all, gathering itself of all the family members is enjoyable and a good opportunity to catch up. >> correct On Chuseok, we make rice cakes and various pan cakes all together. >> correct Seeing my parents smiling when they watch us makes me feel happy as well. >> correct Family gatherings during the holidays are stress-free for most people. >> correct However, some people think that family gathering is unpleasant. >> correct If you are still single, your relatives won’t stop asking you about when you will get married. >> Better: If you are still single, your relatives won’t stop asking you about when will you get married. If you are married, they will keep asking you when you will have a baby. >> Better: If you are married, they will keep asking you when are you going to have a baby. >> OR: If you are married, they will keep asking you when will you have a baby. Sometimes these situations are small, unpleasant blips in otherwise enjoyable celebrations. >> correct

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