What do you think about living in a rural area?

One of my dreams was to live in countryside that I can have dogs on the yard and raise trees and vegetables at farmland avoiding noise and fumes. However, I know well this is a illusion for me. I am a person who takes the whole advantages of the city since I was born. I go to the gym and library by walk everyday. I can also buy most of goods at a shop in a few minutes, if I need. Moreover, I cannot give up a lot of opportunities like studying with others, deserving cultural benefits, and even getting a decent job. I might have to learn more things by numerous teachers in my society and have to more do to achieve my goal with others. Yesterday, an automobile company announced its vision that it will make flying cars in 2030. It would be also possible that I can do many crucial tasks at home, using virtual reality technology in that time. If these imaginations come true, I can be free from the limitation of time and space, I would rethink to realize my forgotten dream.

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What do you think about living in a rural area?

One of my dreams was to live in countryside that I can have dogs on the yard and raise trees and vegetables at farmland avoiding noise and fumes.

>>One of my dreams was to live in the countryside. Where I can have dogs in the yard and grow trees and vegetables in the garden. So, I can avoid the city noise and fumes.

However, I know well this is a illusion for me.

>>However, I know well that this is an illusion for me.

I am a person who takes the whole advantages of the city since I was born.

>>I am a person who takes advantages of the whole city life since I was born.

I go to the gym and library by walk everyday.

>>I go to the gym and to the library by walking every day.

I can also buy most of goods at a shop in a few minutes, if I need.

>>I can also buy most of the goods at a shop in a few minutes, whenever I need them.

Moreover, I cannot give up a lot of opportunities like studying with others, deserving cultural benefits, and even getting a decent job.

>>Moreover, I cannot give up a lot of opportunities like studying with others, enjoying some cultural functions, and even in getting a decent job.

I might have to learn more things by numerous teachers in my society and have to more do to achieve my goal with others.

>>I might have to learn more things from numerous teachers in my society and I have more things to do with others in order to achieve my goals.

Yesterday, an automobile company announced its vision that it will make flying cars in 2030.

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or>>Yesterday, a car company disclosed its vision of making flying cars in 2030.

It would be also possible that I can do many crucial tasks at home, using virtual reality technology in that time.

>>It would also be possible for me to do many crucial tasks at home, using tje virtual reality technology around that time.

If these imaginations come true, I can be free from the limitation of time and space, I would rethink to realize my forgotten dream.

>>If these imaginations of mine will come true, I can be free from the limitations of time and space. I want to rethink about realizing my forgotten dream.