What do you think about the engagement video? Share your answer in a few sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
When i’m watiching this video, i thought a man prepared a lot for his girlfirend. It seems like a movie called La la land when people were dancing, and he appeared with a parade car to her. It was deeply impressive to me, even though i don’t want an attention during a proposal.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Judy!
Believe it or not, a lot of women love attention and this kind of grandiose proposal and wedding. However, I think we are the same. After all in love and marriage, only the two of you will be left even when the child/children will be having their own families. In short, the relationship within the marriage is the most important thing when all of the spectacular things vanish.
Great job in answering your homework question and watching the videpo as well. So, go over my suggestion about the article \'a\' and some words that need to be deleted to make sentences more efficient. Finally the pronoun \'I\' needs to be capitalized all the time.
See you later in class!
-T. Donna~
>> While I’m watching this video, I thought a man prepared a lot for his girlfirend.
It seems like a movie called La la land when people were dancing, and he appeared with a parade car to her.
>> Correct!
It was deeply impressive to me, even though i don’t want an attention during a proposal.
>> It was deeply impressive to me, even though I don’t want attention during a proposal.
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