What do you think about the suggestion that advertising (or sale) of junk food to children should be
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Hi there Sir [이름]!
Yes, I agree with you.
We or the government cannot control the advertisements.
Maybe we can guide and teach our children about the bad effects of junk food.
We can offer them other nutritious snacks instead of allowing them to purchase those kinds of food.
Thanks for your time and effort.
Teacher Nina
I wish the government could restrict advertising or sales of junk food to children.
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However, reality is that the government cannot control everything because we are living in a capitalistic and democratic society where individual’s freedom of choice is respected and corporations’ autonomy should be guaranteed for fair competition.
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> However, in reality, the government cannot control everything . Because we are living in a capitalistic and democratic society, wherein an individual’s freedom of choice is respected and corporations’ autonomy should be guaranteed for fair competition.
When the government has too much power over its citizens and enforce stern regulations, each citizen’s freedom could be jeopardized.
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Considering the downside, maintain a balance is important.
>> Considering the downside, maintaining a balance is important.
To certain degree, it\'s the corporations responsibility to be an active member in promoting health in society because their goal is not only to pursuit profits, but also to contribute to people’s well-being.
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It would be really difficult for the government to place limitations on their advertising practices.
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We cannot expect the government to solve all the social problems.
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We sometimes need a small government that does not intervene in our personal life.
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