What do you think about the suggestion that advertising (or sale) of junk food to children should be
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Hello [이름] [이름]! Thank you for this one. I think education on healthy food is necessary for young children. They should do it in school and at home.
- T. Beth
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Unless they are indicating accurate information on specific food, I agree with restriction of advertising for the children.
>>> CORRECT.
Because the children enable categorizing healthier food and non-healthier food themselves.
>>> Because children can categorize healthy and non-healthy food themselves.
I just think instead of preventing from exposures of advertising, It is more effective of awareness of some component`s disadvantages.
>>> I just think instead of preventing from exposures through advertising, it is more effective to bring awareness on some components\' disadvantages.
when the government try to ban to advertisement on junk food for the children, the owner and related person are protesting this policys and this way affects the spenditure for the privated company.
>>> When the government tries to ban advertisements on junk food for the children, the owner and related person are protesting against this policys and this affects the spenditure for the private company.
I always ask officials to makes a measurement for the specific accidents.
>>> I always ask officials to makes a measurement for specific incidents.
After keeping track of changing of results, I hope for government to apply another way to be more effective.
>>> After keeping track on the changing results, I hope for the government to apply another way to be more effective.
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