What do you think are the biggest transitions in a person’s life? Which is the most important?

2015-12-02 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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In Korea, it is one of the biggest transitions in a person’s life to enter college because the university he/she graduates from will play a pivotal role in getting a job and eventually deciding his/her future career. The academic background will be the backbone of his/her social life and success. And the second important transition is getting a job: which company you will be working for. Most people are judged by which job he/she has in terms of social status. If you are working for a top-tier conglomerate, you will be regarded highly. Even a match-maker will put your name on the top of his/her list as a superior candidate if you have good academic background and work for a well-known big company. Thirdly, getting married will be of critical transition in your life. Marriage doesn’t mean loving two people live together only, but also getting two families get together. You will have in-laws and the relationship with them is so important. Having a chile is another big transition.

강사 첨삭

Magnificent day to you Sir [이름]!

Thanks for your time. ^^

Wow! Those transitions you mentioned below are the same here in our country.

It is really important to go to a good college as much as possible,

Then, in regards to getting married my grandparents told us to think a hundred times before making a decision.

And it also goes with having a child.

Thanks for sending this in today.

Teacher Nina


In Korea, it is one of the biggest transitions in a person’s life to enter college because the university he/she graduates from will play a pivotal role in getting a job and eventually deciding his/her future career.

>> One of the biggest transition in a person’s life is to enter college because the university he/she graduates from will play a pivotal role in getting a job and eventually deciding his/her future career.

>> OR: One of the biggest transition in a person’s life is to enter college because the university he/she graduates from will play a critical role in getting a job and eventually deciding his/her future career.

The academic background will be the backbone of his/her social life and success.

>> correct

And the second important transition is getting a job: which company you will be working for.

>> correct

Most people are judged by which job he/she has in terms of social status.

>> correct

If you are working for a top-tier conglomerate, you will be regarded highly.

>> correct

Even a match-maker will put your name on the top of his/her list as a superior candidate if you have good academic background and work for a well-known big company.

>> correct

Thirdly, getting married will be of critical transition in your life.

>> correct

Marriage doesn’t mean loving two people live together only, but also getting two families get together.

>> correct

You will have in-laws and the relationship with them is so important.

>> correct

Having a chile is another big transition

>> correct

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