What do you think are the biggest transitions in a person’s life? Which is the most important?
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Wow! Those transitions you mentioned below are the same here in our country.
It is really important to go to a good college as much as possible,
Then, in regards to getting married my grandparents told us to think a hundred times before making a decision.
And it also goes with having a child.
Thanks for sending this in today.
Teacher Nina
In Korea, it is one of the biggest transitions in a person’s life to enter college because the university he/she graduates from will play a pivotal role in getting a job and eventually deciding his/her future career.
>> One of the biggest transition in a person’s life is to enter college because the university he/she graduates from will play a pivotal role in getting a job and eventually deciding his/her future career.
>> OR: One of the biggest transition in a person’s life is to enter college because the university he/she graduates from will play a critical role in getting a job and eventually deciding his/her future career.
The academic background will be the backbone of his/her social life and success.
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And the second important transition is getting a job: which company you will be working for.
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Most people are judged by which job he/she has in terms of social status.
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If you are working for a top-tier conglomerate, you will be regarded highly.
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Even a match-maker will put your name on the top of his/her list as a superior candidate if you have good academic background and work for a well-known big company.
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Thirdly, getting married will be of critical transition in your life.
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Marriage doesn’t mean loving two people live together only, but also getting two families get together.
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You will have in-laws and the relationship with them is so important.
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Having a chile is another big transition
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