What do you think are the dangers of not using facemasks in planes, trains and other public transpor

2022-06-06 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Several European Union nations have recently eased the regulation of mask-wearing in the airplane with all the hassles. However, I believe several risks to abolishing the mask mandate in public transportation. First, there is a health risk with various confirmed cases of COVID-19. There was 12,048 infection with nine deaths in South Korea on June 4th which means a high fatality rate. Also, a study showed that risk rises in the closed area where many people gather, such as public transportation. Then there is a concern about social awareness. After COVID-19 is downgraded to level 2 infectious disease, many people have started to treat it like the flu. We are in the phase of lifting the mask mandates in outdoor activities. It would be too abrupt to expand such a measure to a place where many people gather. Accordingly, it is dangerous to lift the face mask regulation in the daily-used transportation.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Aciel! I agree, I think it\'s too early to completely let our guards down on Covid-19.

Several European Union nations have recently eased the regulation of mask-wearing in the airplane with all the hassles. 
>>> correct  
However, I believe several risks to abolishing the mask mandate in public transportation. 
>>> However, I believe there are several risks to abolishing the mask mandate in public transportation.   
First, there is a health risk with various confirmed cases of COVID-19. 
>>> OR: First, there is a health risk due to the various confirmed cases of COVID-19.   
There was 12,048 infection with nine deaths in South Korea on June 4th which means a high fatality rate. 
>>>  correct 
Also, a study showed that risk rises in the closed area where many people gather, such as public transportation. 
>>> correct    
Then there is a concern about social awareness. 
>>> correct   
After COVID-19 is downgraded to level 2 infectious disease, many people have started to treat it like the flu. 
>>> correct   
We are in the phase of lifting the mask mandates in outdoor activities. 
>>> correct   
It would be too abrupt to expand such a measure to a place where many people gather. 
>>>  correct  
Accordingly, it is dangerous to lift the face mask regulation in the daily-used transportation.
>>> correct   

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