What do you think do you need to do in order to achieve your goals in life?

2015-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I am sometimes confused and wonder what my life goals are. What am I pursuing? For what am I living now? We start a morning in a hurry. We jump out of the door to go to work as a daily routine without giving a thought where we’re heading for in our life. What are our life goals? Are they being successful and wealthy? What does success mean? People generally think that success is becoming a famous and high profile person. We all want to be highly regarded by others. We want to get promoted to a higher position that represents our social status. They could be politicians, business tycoons, celebrities, or professors. An example of such figures is Barack Obama, Steve Jobs, Brad Pitt & Angelina Jolie or Johns Hopkins. There are other people who might hold less the spotlight from the media, but sacrificed their lives for the poor and the under-privileged. When I was younger, I had big dreams. However, I’m now thinking that staying healthy is more important than anything else.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Sir [이름]!

Happy Thursday!

Hold on until tomorrow.

I am sure that you are looking forward to take a rest this weekend.
All of the things you mentioned below are right.

Thanks for a perfect composition.

You are right! Health is more important than wealth.

So, stay healthy and fit.

Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina


I am sometimes confused and wonder what my life goals are.

>> correct

What am I pursuing?

>> correct

For what am I living now?

>> correct

We start a morning in a hurry.

>> correct

We jump out of the door to go to work as a daily routine without giving a thought where we’re heading for in our life.

What are our life goals?

>> correct

Are they being successful and wealthy? 

>> correct

What does success mean?

>> correct

People generally think that success is becoming a famous and high profile person.

>> correct

We all want to be highly regarded by others.

>> correct

We want to get promoted to a higher position that represents our social status.

>> correct

They could be politicians, business tycoons, celebrities, or professors.

>> correct

An example of such figures is Barack Obama, Steve Jobs, Brad Pitt & Angelina Jolie or Johns Hopkins.

>> correct

There are other people who might hold less the spotlight from the media, but sacrificed their lives for the poor and the under-privileged.

>> correct

When I was younger, I had big dreams.

>> correct

However, I’m now thinking that staying healthy is more important than anything else.

>> correct

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