What do you think he means by this? Do you agree?
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He must have been ambitious and had what he really liked. It must be happy to die of exhaustion. I admire those people who devote their life to one thing that they believe to be worth doing. I don’t know how much passion is needed to die of exhaustion? Some great people lived like that, and they might be happy but their family or friends around them might not. Big ambition and passion may claim other’s sacrifice. I am not sure it is fortunate or not, anyway I don’t have enthusiasm like that and I’m not ambitious. I prefer a life of ease and relaxation. It is true that boredom is not interesting but I would rather die of boredom than exhaustion. I will do my work suitably and will be bored moderately. I can be used to being bored and I am sure about finding fun thing in the boredom.
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Hello Michelle!
Wow, most of your sentences are flawless in this homework! Way to go! Anyway, yeah, just like you I don\'t have a passion for anything so perhaps I would die being bored than being invested on something. ^ ^
-Rachel
He must have been ambitious and had what he really liked. It must be happy to die of exhaustion.
>> He must have been ambitious and had what he really liked; thus, it must be a delightful thing for him to die of exhaustion.
I admire those people who devote their life to one thing that they believe to be worth doing.
>> correct (awesome wordings and sentence)
I don’t know how much passion is needed to die of exhaustion? Some great people lived like that, and they might be happy but their family or friends around them might not.
>> correct (more awesome sentences)
Big ambition and passion may claim other’s sacrifice. I am not sure if it is fortunate or not, anyway I don’t have enthusiasm like that and I’m not ambitious.
>> correct ( more awesome sentences!)
I prefer a life of ease and relaxation. It is true that boredom is not interesting but I would rather die of boredom than exhaustion.
>> correct (perfect and nice words)
I will do my work suitably and will be bored moderately. I can be used to being bored and I am sure about finding fun thing in the boredom.
>> correct (great)
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