What do you think is best to mention about your introduction? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
What do you think is best to mention about your introduction? Why?
First, I\'ll say my name in an acrostic poem so that the other person can remember it.
(Park: Three claps / Kyung: In Gyeonggi Province and I am a beautiful smile)
2nd: where I live and who live with and also my job
(I have lived in Hwaseong-si with my family, I\'ve been working for global company since 2003 in Hwaseong-si)
3rd, I speak and express my personality
(I like to meet people, study, and work together because I am outgoing.)
4th: I said what I like and my hobby.
(I usually go hiking and take a walk, so I aim to climb 100 famous mountains this year. So I go hiking on weekends and take pictures at the top of the mountain)
강사 첨삭
You have really a nice way to introduce your name, Julia! I am now surprise that you want to climb so many mountains. I hope you can make it!-Faith-
What do you think is best to mention about your introduction? Why?>> CORRECT
First, I\'ll say my name in an acrostic poem so that the other person can remember it.
>> First, I\'ll say my name in an acrostic poem so that the other person can remember it.
(Park: Three claps / Kyung: In Gyeonggi Province and I am a beautiful smile)
(Park: Three claps / Kyung: In Gyeonggi Province and I am a beautiful smile)
>> I will say what \'Park\' means \'three claps\' and Kyung stands for \'Gyeonggi Province, and I have a beautiful smile.\'
2nd: where I live and who live with and also my job
>> Second, I will tell them where I live, who lives with me, and my job.
(I have lived in Hwaseong-si with my family, I\'ve been working for global company since 2003 in Hwaseong-si)
(I have lived in Hwaseong-si with my family, I\'ve been working for global company since 2003 in Hwaseong-si)
>> I will say, \"I have lived in Hwaseong-si with my family, and I\'ve been working for global company since 2003 in this city.\"
3rd, I speak and express my personality
3rd, I speak and express my personality
>> Third, I will talk about my personality.
(I like to meet people, study, and work together because I am outgoing.)
>> I want them to know that I like to meet people, study, and work together with others because I am outgoing.
4th: I said what I like and my hobby.
(I like to meet people, study, and work together because I am outgoing.)
>> I want them to know that I like to meet people, study, and work together with others because I am outgoing.
4th: I said what I like and my hobby.
>> Fourth, I will say what I like and my hobby.
(I usually go hiking and take a walk, so I aim to climb 100 famous mountains this year.
(I usually go hiking and take a walk, so I aim to climb 100 famous mountains this year.
>> I usually go hiking and take a walk, so I aim to climb 100 famous mountains this year.
So I go hiking on weekends and take pictures at the top of the mountain)
>> Therefore, I go hiking on weekends and take pictures at the top of the mountain.
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