What do you think is the best age to be?

2020-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I think early twenties is the best age to be. First, people in early twenties have good physical health. They are more likely to be healthy enough to go travelling, learn various things, and enjoy sports than older people. Second, early twenties is a time of freedom. Most young students learn the same things and have similar life patterns until high school, but they can choose what they want to do after graduation. They can experience various things with wide range of options, although these options may depend on economic power to some degree. They don\'t have to be responsible of the consequences of failure as much as older people, since they don\'t have a family to serve.

강사 첨삭

Good morning Cindy!
Another day is here! Let\'s start our week right; thanks for the response to the homework:) This is an amazing essay-it\'s totally flawless! Way to go!
-Rachel
I think early twenties is the best age to be.
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First, people in early twenties have good physical health. They are more likely to be healthy enough to go travelling, learn various things, and enjoy sports than older people.
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Second, early twenties is a time of freedom. Most young students learn the same things and have similar life patterns until high school, but they can choose what they want to do after graduation.
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They can experience various things with wide range of options, although these options may depend on economic power to some degree. They don\'t have to be responsible of the consequences of failure as much as older people, since they don\'t have a family to serve.
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