What do you think is the best city in Korea and why?
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In my opinion, Seoul, the capital of Korea is the best city in my country, Korea.
In Seoul, there are a lot of famous colleges and there is the most famous university in Korea, Seoul university.
And in seoul, there are a lot of facilities so if we need something, we don\'t have to get out the city.
Also there are a lot of big famous companies\' head offices so we can have an interview very easily.
So I think Seoul, the capital of Korea is the best city in my country, Korea.
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Yes, I heard that that city is a great place. I can\'t wait to go there someday. Thanks for sharing. ^^
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In my opinion, Seoul, the capital of Korea is the best city in my country, Korea.
>> In my opinion, Seoul, the capital of South Korea, is the best city in my country.
In Seoul, there are a lot of famous colleges and there is the most famous university in Korea, Seoul university.
>> CORRECT
And in seoul, there are a lot of facilities so if we need something, we don\'t have to get out the city.
>> There are also lot of facilities so when we need something, we don\'t need to get out of the city just to get it.
Also there are a lot of big famous companies\' head offices so we can have an interview very easily.
>> There are also a lot of big and famous companies\' head offices here so we can have interviews very easily.
So I think Seoul, the capital of Korea is the best city in my country, Korea.
>> So I think that Seoul is the best city in my country.
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