What do you think is the best country in the world and why?

2022-06-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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In my opinion, the best country in the world is my country, South Korea. First, their is a limitation about using weapons such as guns. Because of this reason, we can feel that where we are living is really safe. Second, I am adapted to the environments of my country, South Korea. Actually there are some disadvantages in my country either, but I think here is the best place to live for me.

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Hi [이름]!  

I would love to live in your country as well. The place and the health care benefits are good there. :) 

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In my opinion, the best country in the world is my country, South Korea.
>> CORRECT

First, their is a limitation about using weapons such as guns.
>> CORRECT

Because of this reason, we can feel that where we are living is really safe.
>> Because of this reason, we can feel that where we are living in a safe space. 

Second, I am adapted to the environments of my country, South Korea.
>> Second, I am adapted to the environments here. 

Actually there are some disadvantages in my country either, but I think here is the best place to live for me.
>> Actually, there are some disadvantages in my country either, but I think it is still the best place to live in for me.

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