What do you think is the best performing art (music, dance, and drama)?
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I think that music is the best performing art. Because music can be felt with hearing. It means that people can hear music during doing something. So I think that music is the best performing art.
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Here\'s your edited essay, [이름]!
Actually, I also think that music is the best performing art for the same reason you gave.
Cheers,
Jean~~
I think that music is the best performing art. Because music can be felt with hearing.
>> I think that music is the best performing art because music can be felt through hearing.
>> [In formal writing, it\'s best not to start your sentence with the word \'because\'. It\'s fine in informal writing, such as texting, or in informal speech.]
It means that people can hear music during doing something.
>> It means that people can hear music while they are doing something.
So I think that music is the best performing art.
>> correct
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