What do you think is the best way to keep in touch with your good friends?

2014-06-03 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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I think that the best way to keep in touch with my good friends is to build up an online social network with them like being a friend in Facebook. When I was a university student, I could take a lot of chances to play together with my friends. However, it is extremely difficult to meet them for a fun after marriage because I am always busy in working as well as spending time with my family members. So there is nothing better than keeping in touch with them by using an online social network. First, it is easy and fast way to communicate with them. You can keep in contact with your foreign friends without a considerable amount of effort. You are able to share your thoughts and opinions with your friends freely. Second, you don't need to pay money when you join in a website like Facebook. This is another merit that makes people encouraged to participate in Facebook. However, there is one defect which stay some people away from it. Your privacy might be intruded by strangers on line.

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    Good afternoon, [이름]! There sure are many ways to keep in touch with friends but the best ones are for free. It may have a lot of advantages but with what has become the law of nature, there are also disadvantages to balance it out. And of course, [이름], you already mentioned the main ones. It is then up to us on how we are going to handle such matters. We can be in control but not all the time, so we need to be always on guard. It is what makes life interesting, isn\'t it? Thanks for keeping in touch with me through your compositions, [이름]! You may also write down anything that you like along with your homework, if you like. Stay connected! _Klein I think that the best way to keep in touch with my good friends is to build up an online social network with them like being a friend in Facebook. >>Correct!When I was a university student, I could take a lot of chances to play together with my friends. >>Correct! However, it is extremely difficult to meet them for a fun after marriage because I am always busy in working as well as spending time with my family members. >>However, it is extremely difficult to meet them for fun after marriage because I am always busy at work as well as at home to spend time with my family members. >>However, it is extremely difficult to meet them for fun after I got married because I am always busy working and spending some quality time with my family.So there is nothing better than keeping in touch with them by using an online social network. >>Correct First, it is easy and fast way to communicate with them. >>First, it is an easy and fast way to communicate with them. You can keep in contact with your foreign friends without a considerable amount of effort. >>Correct! OR >> You can stay connected/in touch with your foreign friends without much effort. You are able to share your thoughts and opinions with your friends freely. >>Correct! Second, you don\'t need to pay money when you join in a website like Facebook. >>Correct This is another merit that makes people encouraged to participate in Facebook. >>Correct OR >> This is another merit that encourages people to participate in Facebook.However, there is one defect which stay some people away from it. >>However, there is one defect that keeps some people away from it. >>However, it has one drawback that keeps some people away from it. Your privacy might be intruded by strangers on line. >>Correct [online]

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