What do you think is the common cause of obesity?
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I think psychological problems are the most common cause of obesity.
>>Correct
The stress from loneliness, lack, pressure release anti-stress hormones.
>>The stress from loneliness, lack and pressure releases anti-stress hormones.
That kinds of hormones cause overeating.
>>Those kinds of hormones cause overreacting.
A few times of overeating makes people more stressful, which in turns creates a cycle that leads to overeating.
>>A few times of overreacting makes people more stressful which creates a cycle that leads to overreacting.
For example, just before my period, I can not stop to eat food which are salty, hot and sweet even I don\'t like sweet tasty normally.
>>For example, just before my period, I can\'t stop eating food which are salty, hot and sweet even if I don\'t normally like sweet food.
After I eat all of I want to eat, I felt guilty and get a lot of stress.
>>After eating all the food that I want to eat, I felt guilty and I was stressed.
Those stress make me become lethargic.
>>Correct
So, I don\'t go out of my bed.
>>So, I don\'t get up from my bed.
I do just lie down on my bed and kill the time.
>>I just lie down on my bed and kill the time.
Also, unnecessary intake is another reason.
>>Correct.
Adult body doesn\'t need much as young children they don\'t spend energy to grow up.
>>Adult body doesn\'t need as much as young children\'s body to have more energy growing up.
And people\'s activity decreases with age.
>>Correct.
However, many people eat the same amount of food as they did in their teens and twenties.
>>Correct
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