What do you think is the importance of friendships?
학생이 쓴 원문
First, I think that friendships do not measure about something.
Some people told \"I like more than you\"
Friendship is not measure what each others for mind of size.
Just enjoy each others and spend time together.
Second, Friendship have to have altruistic mind.
One side have selfish and another have altruistic.
It\'s very hard to keep friendship.
Because people have a love of tank.
This tank have to full for another\'s love.
And when people love someone use that tank.
Sometime one side want to full own tank and do not want giving love.
Having a altruistic people are just spending there own tank.
So altruistic people\'s tanks keep dry, and they are hurt.
But selfish people\' tanks are not full up.
And then they are broken to friendship.
We have to love each others and have altruistic mind and not measure.
Just love.
That\'s the important thing of friendship.
강사 첨삭
Happy Monday Simon! It was great reading your composition. Thank you for sharing your thoughts through writing. I learned a lot in your homework today. Until the next one. Talk to you in class.
Just enjoy each others and spend time together.
One side have selfish and another have altruistic.
Sometime one side want to full own tank and do not want giving love.
>>Sometimes, one side wants to own the full tank and does not want to give love.
Having a altruistic people are just spending there own tank.
Just love. That\'s the important thing of friendship.
~Teacher Sheila
First, I think that friendships do not measure about something.
>>First, I think that friendships do not measure anything.
OR>>First, I think that friendships can\'t be measured.
Some people told \"I like more than you\"
Some people told \"I like more than you\"
>>Some people say \"I like you more\"
Friendship is not measure what each others for mind of size.
Friendship is not measure what each others for mind of size.
>>Friendship is not measured based on size.
OR>>Friendship is not measured based on how big it is.
Just enjoy each others and spend time together.
>>Just enjoy each other\'s company and spend more time together.
Second, Friendship have to have altruistic mind.
Second, Friendship have to have altruistic mind.
>>Second, friendship should have an altruistic mind.
One side have selfish and another have altruistic.
>>One side is selfish and another side is altruistic.
OR>>One side is selfish and the other side is altruistic.
It\'s very hard to keep friendship.
It\'s very hard to keep friendship.
>>CORRECT
OR>>It\'s very hard to maintain friendship.
Because people have a love of tank.
Because people have a love of tank.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Because people have a lot of space.
This tank have to full for another\'s love.
This tank have to full for another\'s love.
>>This tank has to be full for another love.
OR>>This space has to be full for another love.
And when people love someone use that tank.
And when people love someone use that tank.
>>And when people love, someone has to use that tank.
Sometime one side want to full own tank and do not want giving love.
>>Sometimes, one side wants to own the full tank and does not want to give love.
Having a altruistic people are just spending there own tank.
>>For altruistic people, they are just spending their own tank.
OR>>For altruistic people, they are just giving their own tank.
So altruistic people\'s tanks keep dry, and they are hurt.
>>So altruistic people\'s tanks become dry and they are hurt.
So altruistic people\'s tanks keep dry, and they are hurt.
>>So altruistic people\'s tanks become dry and they are hurt.
OR>>So altruistic people\'s tanks become dry and they are in pain.
But selfish people\' tanks are not full up.
>>But the tanks of selfish people are not full.
But selfish people\' tanks are not full up.
>>But the tanks of selfish people are not full.
OR>>But the tanks of selfish people are not completely full.
And then they are broken to friendship.
And then they are broken to friendship.
>>And then they can break friendships.
OR>>And they have broken friendships.
We have to love each others and have altruistic mind and not measure.
We have to love each others and have altruistic mind and not measure.
>>We have to love each other and have an altruistic mind like not measuring.
Just love. That\'s the important thing of friendship.
>>Love is the most important thing in friendship.
OR>>Love is the most important thing when it comes to friendship.
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