What do you think is the importance of friendships?

2019-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Sheila

학생이 쓴 원문

To make a good friendship each other people, We have to listen to the other person carefully. We need to be kind and friendly than others. Do laugh a lot and then the others will see you and smile. At that time, we can feel close. Also we must keep a promise with others to make a friendship. It is the most important things in life.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]! Yes, indeed! I agree with your opinions about the importance of friendship. Listening to the other person is indeed important in any relationship. 

Somehow, I can connect with you because it seems that we have the same experiences and same beliefs about having friends.

Until the next one [이름]! :)

~Teacher Sheila :)


To make a good friendship each other people, We have to listen to the other person carefully.
>>To make a good friendship with other people, we have to listen to the other person carefully.

We need to be kind and friendly than others.
>>We need to be kinder and more friendly than others.
OR>>We need to be kind and friendly to others.

Do laugh a lot and then the others will see you and smile.
>>We need to laugh a lot so that others will see you and they will also smile.

At that time, we can feel close.
>>CORRECT

Also we must keep a promise with others to make a friendship.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Also, we must keep a promise with others to be friends.

It is the most important things in life.
>>CORRECT

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