What do you think is the most dangerous disease

2022-07-13 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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I think, the most dangerous disease is dementia. Even if someone has no problems on someone\'s on physical body, Dementia ruins someone\'s life who has dementia. I hope not to get dementia in my life. If I get dementia, all of my family will suffer to care me. So, I have been doing workout everyday not to get dementia.

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Good day, Sir [이름]ny!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I think, the most dangerous disease is dementia. 
>> CORRECT!
Even if someone has no problems on someone\'s on physical body, Dementia ruins someone\'s life who has dementia. 
>> Even if someone has no problems on someone\'s physical body, Dementia ruins someone\'s life.
I hope not to get dementia in my life. 
>> I hope not to get dementia. 
If I get dementia, all of my family will suffer to care me. 
>> If I get dementia, all of my family members will suffer to take care of me. 
So, I have been doing workout everyday not to get dementia.
>> CORRECT!

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