What do you think is the most important thing in a celebration?

2014-05-13 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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The most important thing in a celebration is not to forget the special day like birthday, wedding anniversary, parents’ day, etc. Celebration doesn’t have to be a huge event, nor reserved for the biggest events or holidays of the year though. Because the majority of our days are spent doing trivial tasks like working or cleaning our homes, we all need things to look forward to. Celebration can happen for a variety of informal reasons. So, let’s celebrate even a small occasion. We do not need to spend a lot of money. All we need is a warm heart with just a small gift. If you are in a difficult situation finally, it’s just fine without a gift. Your presence itself could be a great gift for the celebration. We can invite our friends and relatives and share the joy of excitement. Celebration is the thing that everyone should take time for. Celebration adds an excitement and a lot of fun to life. There is something deep inside humanity that loves to celebrate the best things in life.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]!

Thank you for sending this marvelous homework.

You made a lot of correct and sensible sentences.

I am really proud that you are getting used with the language. Way to go.

Keep on improving! See you in class.

Have a great night.

Teacher Nina

 

The most important thing in a celebration is not to forget the special day like birthday, wedding anniversary, parents’ day, etc.

>> Correct!

>> Better: The most important thing in a celebration is not to forget the special days like birthday, wedding anniversary, parents\'day, etc.

Celebration doesn’t have to be a huge event, nor reserved for the biggest events or holidays of the year though.

>> Correct!

Because the majority of our days are spent doing trivial tasks like working or cleaning our homes, we all need things to look forward to.

>> Correct!

Celebration can happen for a variety of informal reasons.

>> Celebration can happen for variety of informal reasons.

So, let’s celebrate even a small occasion.

>> Correct!

We do not need to spend a lot of money.

>> Correct!

All we need is a warm heart with just a small gift.

>> Correct!

If you are in a difficult situation finally, it’s just fine without a gift.

>> If you are in a difficult situation, it\'s just fine without a gift,

Your presence itself could be a great gift for the celebration.

>> Correct!

>> OR: Your presence itself could be a great gift for the celebrator.

We can invite our friends and relatives and share the joy of excitement.

>> Correct! 

>> OR: We can invite our friends, relatives and share the joy of excitement with them.

Celebration is the thing that everyone should take time for.

>> Correct!

Celebration adds an excitement and a lot of fun to life.

>> Correct!

There is something deep inside humanity that loves to celebrate the best things in life.

>> Correct!

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