What do you think is the most important thing to make a happy family?

2020-03-27 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

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The most important thing is spending a lot of time with your family. I immigrated 1 year ago to the United States of America. So I\'ve thought about my family a lot and regretted what I didn\'t do my best for my family. Working at a big company, I used to be busy and have many friends. I spent the time after finishing work with friends and coworkers. Even if living with my parents, I usually didn\'t spend on weekends with my parents. Fortunately, my company gives us 10 days of paid leave every year. So I could take a day off next to weekends to make a long weekend. I would go on a trip to Korea like Japan, the Philippines and etc. I have gone on a trip twice with my mother. But we fought during traveling having some expectations to me. I was not such a patient person that I couldn\'t tolerate her demands she wants to eat, stay and buy. Even if we were not comfortable with each other during vacation, I am happy to remember and miss the trips. I have to make a call my mom right now!

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday, [이름]! ^^
Thank you for this week and I hope you will have a wonderful weekend. ^^

- T. Rina ^^


1. The most important thing is spending a lot of time with your family. 
>> CORRECT!

2. I immigrated 1 year ago to the United States of America. 
>> CORRECT!

3. So I\'ve thought about my family a lot and regretted what I didn\'t do my best for my family. 
>> So I\'ve thought about my family a lot and regretted that I didn\'t do my best for my family.

4. Working at a big company, I used to be busy and have many friends. 
>> Working at a big company, I used to be busy and had many friends.

5. I spent the time after finishing work with friends and coworkers. 
>> CORRECT!

6. Even if living with my parents, I usually didn\'t spend on weekends with my parents. 
>> Even if I was living with my parents, I usually didn\'t spend time with them on weekends.

7. Fortunately, my company gives us 10 days of paid leave every year. 
>> CORRECT!

8. So I could take a day off next to weekends to make a long weekend. 
>> So I could take a day off next to weekends to have a long weekend.

9. I would go on a trip to Korea like Japan, the Philippines and etc. 
>> CORRECT!

10. I have gone on a trip twice with my mother. 
>> CORRECT!

11. But we fought during traveling having some expectations to me. 
>> But we fought while traveling because she had high expectations about me.

12. I was not such a patient person that I couldn\'t tolerate her demands she wants to eat, stay and buy. 
>> I was not such a patient person that I couldn\'t tolerate her demands like what she wanted to eat and buy and where she wanted to stay.

13. Even if we were not comfortable with each other during vacation, I am happy to remember and miss the trips. 
>> CORRECT!

14. I have to make a call my mom right now!
>> I have to make a call to my mom right now.

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